down the rabbit hole

down the rabbit hole

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#12

08-27-2014, 10:07 AM

drink me is fantastic.

S4, while i like the directness, was a bit too cliché toward the end. I dunno, I would do a rewrite on last 2 lines, but I try my best not to.\

mel the splaining my crit chick.

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down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-23-2014, 03:32 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by billy - 08-23-2014, 04:08 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-24-2014, 02:34 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by bena - 08-24-2014, 11:54 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-25-2014, 12:49 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by bena - 08-25-2014, 01:22 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by bob68 - 08-26-2014, 12:21 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-26-2014, 04:33 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by bob68 - 08-26-2014, 04:39 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by makeshift - 08-26-2014, 01:47 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-27-2014, 12:09 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by bena - 08-27-2014, 10:07 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-27-2014, 12:13 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by 71degrees - 08-27-2014, 11:25 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by bena - 08-27-2014, 04:41 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-28-2014, 01:47 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by danny_ - 08-28-2014, 11:46 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 08-28-2014, 12:28 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by billy - 09-09-2014, 05:53 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by zahrakh - 09-09-2014, 11:21 PM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by cjchaffin - 09-10-2014, 12:34 AM

RE: down the rabbit hole - by Rustymetal - 01-28-2015, 07:32 PM

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