down the rabbit hole

[cjchaffin]

People seem to like the title, and I love any allusion to Lewis, but I don't think the poem is bizarre enough for this reference. This seems like a pretty common occurrence, instead of an unusual one, and in many ways that makes it a great poem--it's pretty damn close to home.

I think S4 is the weakest because you've given us such vivid images to cling to, then this S is pretty narrative and blah. (sorry)

The frozen cake top--does this refer to a frozen wedding cake? I think so, but it gave me a pause just a bit, may be an over-the-pond vernacular issue, though.

It's very striking in its realism. I've read a few times now, and even while I'm writing I'm wondering...perhaps the title does fit. God, I am so useless...

mel.

oh jeez! you are not useless. i like that you invested enough in the poem to engage it and go back and forth with the meaning and visuals. that is just as valuable to me as someone coming in and simply telling me what they like and don't like. and don't ever be sorry if you feel there's a weak spot for me to address, that's the reason why i'm here!

thanks mel, you get a hug today ><