San Francisco, 1992

[crow]

wow, crow. just...wow.

that was one of the most in-depth critiques i've ever received. you really made me rethink my intent with this piece.

i workshop because i want to learn and grow. i'm grateful you took the time to go through this as thoroughly as you did, because i definitely learned something today.

so thank you. i'm pleased as punch with your ideas and i have my work cut out for me here.

You're very welcome! Sorry that my tone was a bit sour. Hopefully, I didn't come off as too much of a scowl

Just to rehearse my overall take, this is a poem with some truly excellent features. If you'll harness them toward a daring conclusion, I think it'll really be a jewel in your crown. (It's good as is, but I hope you take my meaning.)