The Walk

[Truerenigma]

Ok...


I think you are defending this a bit too much. I only had a thot. But lines like "but I will give to him in song " and "nights like this no turn is wrong" and "ill pretend he's walking by my side" are used in a lot of love songs/poems.


The confession isn't that he is gay, but that he has attraction for another person who might not share the same feelings for him.


But, it's your poem.

meh. that's just it. I'm not sure what you think I might be defending. If you think the poem can speak to people dealing with the difficulties of a possibly unrequited love, sounds good to me.

I did enjoy the poem.

I just wanted to understand it more. I feel its one of those poems they might have a english lit class read, then open it up for discussion.

Thank you Q, that's very nice to hear.

I suppose I could explain some what I was trying to do in the poem, as it doesn't seem like anyone really has any suggestion for editing, so we might as well move into analysis and q & a if that's what you'd like to do. It's important to know that it's not of any greater importance than any reader's takeaways though, and it's only useful for figuring out different ways of looking at craft, a poem, or particular poem. If it bothers any of the mods they can always move it to discussion, I guess.