First Date

[ajcohen613]

I squeezed conversation out
like empty toothpaste; interesting metaphor..though I will say that the silence/mention of noise alongside the toothpaste metaphor is a little odd.
agonizing over every silence.

Her smile seemed as forced as my words,
and I couldn't make myself look her in the eyes. I like these two lines; straightforward and honest.

The steak was bleeding raw,
and I felt I was the cow
as she made the first cut. I like the movement from the steak to you betwixt all the painfulness of the date and attempts to break the awkwardness. In situations like this, we might as well be rare steak: questionably cooked, barely seasoned and tough to chew. Good job, just tweak it a bit and you have something quite nice.