Right Now I'm Wondering...
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Hi.

I read this a few times and find myself agreeing with what Bunx said. I think if you break your lines it would flow much smoother and maybe help you see the poem in your head better. I like the theme, very classic. I can picture a single someone sitting in a park daydreaming in the summer sun, wondering where there true love is.
What is the point of living if you don't allow yourself to live?
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Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Smudge173 - 08-04-2014, 03:55 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by SomeRandom - 08-04-2014, 02:05 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Smudge173 - 08-05-2014, 03:15 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Bunx - 08-07-2014, 07:56 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by bena - 08-11-2014, 05:19 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by billy - 08-11-2014, 06:39 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by bena - 08-11-2014, 10:27 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by billy - 08-11-2014, 11:07 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by bena - 08-12-2014, 01:51 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by alatos - 08-12-2014, 12:18 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Random Phoenix - 08-15-2014, 09:28 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by UberWilhelm - 08-19-2014, 10:35 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by VisualPoet703 - 09-01-2014, 06:29 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by zahrakh - 09-01-2014, 11:40 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by ThePinsir - 09-03-2014, 12:54 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Mwaba don - 09-11-2014, 07:44 AM



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