A Love Armed
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(08-11-2014, 04:47 AM)metalfan91 Wrote:  
The world awaits a war on wars.
A black flag as a declaration
To burn all flags and declarations.
A friendship,
Defending itself.

The world awaits
A language before words
That can find unarmored hearts
In which to thrive; toppling pillars
Of oppression and enslavement.
And fear.

The world awaits a love armed
To create a state of sovereigns.
A weapon of mass liberation;
A bomb that bursts into
Flourishing moments.
Hi there Metalfan.

Let me start off with I am extremely new to any kind of formal poetry (both writing and critiquing) so forgive me if I am missing anything that should have been obvious. I get the overall idea of your poem but like the others there are just a few things that don't make any sense to me. What did you mean with a "Friendship defending itself"? I don't understand what you were trying to say there. Also, what is a "a love armed"? I'm just not making the connection here to the rest of the poem.
What is the point of living if you don't allow yourself to live?
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Messages In This Thread
A Love Armed - by metalfan91 - 08-11-2014, 04:47 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by SomeRandom - 08-12-2014, 03:22 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by metalfan91 - 08-12-2014, 11:41 PM
RE: A Love Armed - by alatos - 08-13-2014, 12:48 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by metalfan91 - 08-13-2014, 07:06 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by L Oquence - 08-13-2014, 06:02 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by bwasroy - 08-16-2014, 07:34 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by metalfan91 - 08-24-2014, 04:06 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by KerouacJack - 08-18-2014, 08:43 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by billy - 08-18-2014, 08:24 PM
RE: A Love Armed - by UberWilhelm - 08-19-2014, 10:25 AM
RE: A Love Armed - by Lysander Gray - 10-04-2014, 01:31 PM



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