ashes

[Anonymous]

I rise from the ashes
as every word you say at me clashes. rhyme sounds forced here

My wrath is dying away in a way ?
every time you say 'I love you'
I can't get enough of you

I can't get enough of feeling your skin
as light as a feather in the wind liked this line!
yet scorches me as a fiery coal I'm holding
when the fear of losing you is growing this is rough for a slant rhyme if that's what you're going for

I shall hold this coal until my hand is only bones
and then I'll hold it longer
because this pain doesn't hurt The last two lines in this stanza sound prosaic

to my ashes I return
without wrath, hatred or any mourn
I return peaceful minded
because it is me you have reminded omit have
of old time romantics and love omit time ?
and now,
now I'm free as a dove

I enjoyed the poem. Some parts were a bit confusing. I left my comments above & bolded. Thanks for the read.