08-13-2014, 05:36 AM
I spent a while trying to figure out the rhyme scheme....granted our accents are a pond away...but I don't see how some of it fits. Perhaps it's just sporadic, which I don't mind, especially in a poem about a punk band (been in several myself)-- in fact, I'm not totally sure if you are a Brit or an Aussie, which totally changes the 'punter' meaning. At any rate, pretty sure it's brit.
The one nit I do have is the line that says "it were the audience" ---audience is single, so it should be was. very interesting piece....
bean
The one nit I do have is the line that says "it were the audience" ---audience is single, so it should be was. very interesting piece....
bean