The Walk

[Truerenigma]

Hi, true, I've been enjoying this. So melancholy in it's simplicity. The only crit I can come up with is the poem gives a lot of weight to a confession that is only mildly confessed. The only one I can find is L7, unless the confession is just not previously expressing the obvious love. That may just be a nit, the poem as a whole is full and haunting. Thanks for posting it.

for milo

I will confess and tell my friend
but I will give to him in song
as frogs sing night unto its end.

Frogs sing bass, and crickets blend
their melodies - I’ll hum along,
then I’ll confess and tell my friend.

I've missed my turn, my aimless wend
has led me where I don’t belong
as frogs sing night unto its end.

I’ll meet him just around this bend,
on nights like this no turn is wrong, Love this line.
I will confess and tell my friend.

But for right now I’ll just pretend
he’s walking by my side so long
as frogs sing night unto its end.

If he’s not in this marsh, well then
I’ll search beyond the wood and on.
I will confess and tell my friend
as frogs sing night unto its end.

Thank you very much ella. There is no confession. It may poke a bit of fun at confessionals, but that's not important, or the idea here. What's important is that part of the poem belongs to the reader, and it allows them to bring their own confession along for the walk. Duplicity. There is a space for the reader in the poem. Is the love that obvious?

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Oh dear god....I should know what form this is, and I just can't figure it out. Is it a villanelle? It's a villanelle isn't it?

At any rate, I love it...there's joy in repetition. I'm sure milo will love it too. <--oh ffs I just *got* it....milo's poem had the allusion to Dylan Thomas' Do not go gentle into that good night.

I'm so thick. I get it now.

Nevermind. that wasn't milo that was chris...so...bleh. Still thick.

Don't fret. The meditative walk is a classical form. Milo enjoys classical figures. If there is an allusion it is probably virgil and dante and frost and thousands of other great poets and poems, but it's not a footnote poem, the problems are interpretive problems involving classical symbols more than allusion. The expression is outside the body of the poem and doesn't effect meaning or the text itself. You're not out of the loop.

Thank you for the comments. xo

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for milo

I will confess and tell my friend
but I will give to him in song
as frogs sing night unto its end.

Frogs sing bass, and crickets blend
their melodies - I’ll hum along, - I love the complexity of this stanza. Nicely done.
then I’ll confess and tell my friend.

I've missed my turn, my aimless wend
has led me where I don’t belong here you say you've made a wrong turn, but then in the next stanza, you say you can't make wrong turns. Is it supposed to be a "oh, wait, I can't make a wrong turn" sort of moment?
as frogs sing night unto its end.

I’ll meet him just around this bend,
on nights like this no turn is wrong,
I will confess and tell my friend.

But for right now I’ll just pretend
he’s walking by my side so long
as frogs sing night unto its end.

If he’s not in this marsh, well then
I’ll search beyond the wood and on.
I will confess and tell my friend
as frogs sing night unto its end.

Really nice poem. Nice rhythm and movement through the stanzas and I love the alternating repetitive line. If I understand the poem right, you have something good to tell your friend, but you're not in a huge hurry because you are living completely in the moment. So, the future is there in your mind, but is not pressing. I love it. I'm sorry about all the red. I couldn't seem to fix that. Mine is bold

fixed/mod

Thank you very much for the comments. I'm glad you enjoy the poem.