The 7 hour war

[maximumjake]

Jake. I love science fiction poetry. Your opening and closing lines are the superior ones. The intervening passages are a bit too technical, visual and visceral. For me this may have been more effective had you stuck to the ethereal flavor of the bookend lines. Thanks for sharing your post-apocalyptic world with us./Chris

Thanks for the read and your comments. Perhaps I can play with the middle parts a little and see what happens.