08-08-2014, 08:02 AM
"Like" is a weaker syllable than "I" -- reversing the word order will improve the meter. Additionally, I feel it's more powerful to introduce Faust before the generic I.
It could be worse
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A Sonnet Inspired by Marlowe's Faustus
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