08-07-2014, 07:45 PM 
	
	
	
		Firstly I liked your introduction, it made me giggle. I don't really know the technicalities of poetry so if it's okay then I'm just going to comment on how your poem made me feel. I really enjoyed your style of writing, the last two lines are my favourite and I feel drive home your point succinctly. Your poem made me reflect upon my day and think about all the things I said. More than anything I like writing that makes me think (which is the whole point of any writing I guess). I'd like to read more of your work  I felt like it has a lot more to it than other cliched first attempts at poetry involving unoriginal sentiments about unrequited love. I hope my thoughts serve as encouragement for you!
 I felt like it has a lot more to it than other cliched first attempts at poetry involving unoriginal sentiments about unrequited love. I hope my thoughts serve as encouragement for you!
	
	
	
	
 I felt like it has a lot more to it than other cliched first attempts at poetry involving unoriginal sentiments about unrequited love. I hope my thoughts serve as encouragement for you!
 I felt like it has a lot more to it than other cliched first attempts at poetry involving unoriginal sentiments about unrequited love. I hope my thoughts serve as encouragement for you!
	
