Mayday

[billy]

a good edit. i'm undecided which fireflies line i prefer but it reads a lot better with the changes made.

billy/mercedes/ella edit 1

Mayday

My voice takes refuge at nightfall,
mute in the dimness under the yews,
spirited away in tiny rouge berries. i do prefer rouge

It's flame is in the bellies of fireflies,
smoldering with luciferase,
hovering above dew on the rye.

My imagination is secreted
beneath the pond’s algal cloak [it's better]
quiescent with timid fish among the reeds.

I need

one berry of a chance, i wouldn't worry to much about the berry
a single bioluminescent photon
or musing minnow
to nibble at my trolling lines.

Necessity begs illumination
to clarify this tarnished eve,
for she is slowly graying;never noticed it but i like the feminine night in [she] and [eve]
almost out of view taking out the [my] polishes this stanza up no end.
and reach.

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Mayday

This voice takes refuge at nightfall,
mute in the dimness under the yews,
spirited away in tiny blue berries.

It's flame is concealed in the abdomens
of fireflies, smoldering with luciferase,
hovering above dew on the rye.

My imagination's secreted in a pond
beneath an algae cape, inside a cache
with timid fish among the reeds.

I need

one berry of a chance,
a single bioluminescent photon
or minnow’s musing
to nibble at my trolling lines.

Necessity begs illumination
to clarify this tarnished eve,
for she is slowly graying;
almost out of my view
and reach.