Fair Deal (True Love in the House edit)

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Hey ella. I've read this a few times before. Never commented because previous comments seemed comprehensive enough. First off, I love the title. - The edit feels much stronger. I wonder if in the penultimate line you might not need "carpets". It might be implied by vacuums. Something as simple as -"He vacuums and he washes clothes" might add up better for the last line. Not sure - just my impression. An enjoyable commentary. Thanks for sharing. Paul

Thanks, glad to hear it's going in the right direction. I'll think on cleaning up the line you mention, yes, carpets is just filler. I really appreciate the read and comment.