08-03-2014, 06:35 AM
(07-31-2014, 04:07 PM)Erthona Wrote: A quatrain with the first three lines having four accents, and the last line having one accent. Discounting the very first line.Thanks Dale for taking the time and using the right word to describe the form, I could not have done that, you and others like you are fortunate in that you see the matrix.
A rhyme pattern of xAxA. Both rhyme and accentual verse consistent throughout except for where it has already been pointed out.
My favorite line was: "the mop bucket peed on its feet"
Overall all a witty and funny poem.
Dale
Best Keith(07-31-2014, 05:26 PM)billy Wrote: loved it.Thanks Billy, Milo to blame....naPM
(07-14-2014, 08:09 AM)Keith Wrote: The cutlery drawer said the glass was a whore
for drinking all night with some hands,
a bottle of wine said she's out all the time,
the glass said you wouldn't understand.
The tap on the sink said the plug hole stinks
and that limescale lowers the tone,
the recycling bin said just ignore him
he's always up polishing his chrome.
The kitchen table claimed the chairs were unable
to sit still with their legs underneath,
the chairs agreed and were really quite pleased, either chair
as the mop bucket peed on its feet. or [their feet]
The gas from the hob, left on by a knob,
filled the room for most of the day,
it's believed that a spark switched on in the dark,
blew the poor cooker away.
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out

