Fair Deal (True Love in the House edit)

[ellajam]

The hissing pan for meat or crepe didn't work for me. I just doesn't roll off the tounge the way it should and it leaves me off put.

Thanks for reading, and for pointing out a weak line. I'll see what I can do about it.

I guess I really can't complain;

Just knowing that you can go through an ordeal like house cleaning, whether it's spring or for the love of cleanliness, and not complain about it shows me a quality that can not go unnoticed. You remind me of a modern day Cinderella singing songs of melancholy and madness while she works her fingers to the bone. It's a thing of beauty to whistle while we work and you have certainly showcased this ability in a way that makes any precious feel like a bag of angel dust.

Kisses!

Hi, bunny, while I would understand your comment if I had posted in the Fun Forum, I posted in a workshop looking for insight on what works and doesn't work in this poem. I know it's a lightweight poem, but it still has form, meter and rhyme that I'm sure can use some improvement. More detail would be appreciated, and frankly, it's expected in the workshops. Thanks for reading.