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orderly and manicured, to fit in a suggest into here and the removal of [the] on the next line.

Billy, what do you mean by this?

Also, just out of curiosity before I leave this poem to ripen for a while before I end up killing it - any opinions on :

A small patch of grass offers refuge
to the worn out soles of feet no need for [the] it's also cliche; worn out feet is something that's been said in every house in world.
that walk on concrete paths.

I'm saying worn out feet ( which yes - is kinda boring)
but i'm trying to suggest worn out souls - without saying souls

what if i put emphasis on the word soles - as in...

A small patch of grass offered refuge,
to those worn out soles
of feet that walk on concrete paths.

Thanks for the thoughts