A Tender Violence/It is. What is it?

[poe]

You have some nice metaphors or similes here. I liked "rip tides in slow waves"and "..How the smoke fills the room blooming in moon-flowers". Assonance abounds throughout which is good when it comes naturally. Try not to get romanced by tempting word-sound combinations that deviate from the true feelings at the bottom of where these word originate. Such things as,"infliction of conviction or addictive prediction" are unnecessary rambling , unnecessary because you already have plenty of good word combinations with lots of natural assonance. You don't need to reach over the deep end to impress your audience. Its a very sexy, love longing piece. You have original metaphors and lots of assonance. I expect it will be well received. Good luck.