07-24-2014, 07:00 AM
(07-14-2014, 08:09 AM)Keith Wrote: The cutlery drawer said the glass was a whoreHa, ha, ha...I love your sensibility, love your stuff. Just a couple of things that I might have written in my own different way...flow thing I guess...no biggie...joyful read.
for drinking all night with some hands,
a bottle of wine said she's out all the time,
the glass said you wouldn't understand. (...said you'd not understand...or something like that)
The tap on the sink said the plug hole stinks (thought quotes around "the plug hole stinks" for tonal emphasis...IDK)
and that limescale lowers the tone,
the recycling bin said just ignore him
he's always up polishing his chrome. (seems like there might be a better way to schmooze this line)
The kitchen table claimed the chairs were unable
to sit still with their legs underneath,
the chairs agreed and were really quite pleased,
as the mop bucket peed on its feet.
The gas from the hob, left on by a knob,
filled the room for most of the day,
it's believed that a spark switched on in the dark,
blew the poor cooker away.
You can't hate me more than I hate myself. I win.
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."