Family Picnic

[poe]

Thanks Poe, I believe you are right, and some of the language could be made more consistent, however I am not sure how I will start with that. I am no longer capable of reading in Greek or Hebrew, and was never proficient in Aramaic, but I will consider it and see what I can do.

Thanks,

Dale

I don't think you need to write in a different language, there., Dale. I just think you could use a different style or way of saying the same things in English, just in a different way. If you typed the words "slob", or "idiot", "or delusional"or "masochistic", into your thesaurus, I'm sure you could find other words to express the same sentiments. I really liked the setting, and the idea, of this poem. Its almost like time travel, or a traipse back through history. Cool.