07-23-2014, 03:38 PM
while a haiku is short form the haibun is rather longer, and probably best placed in one of the other forums we have. i'm not sure the haiku is a haiku ( i can't see it as one, maybe it's a senryu)
the prose part is definitely prose though it reads a little on the heavy side. the last line does however tie to prose nicely into the short poem
the prose part is definitely prose though it reads a little on the heavy side. the last line does however tie to prose nicely into the short poem
(07-23-2014, 05:37 AM)ajcohen613 Wrote: *Hopefully this counts (?)
Such Nights
The constellations are pulsating. She walks to him through the crowd on the porch. Her eyes meander, emerald wind chimes quivering in his rippling cooper puddles. She asks him stale questions about himself seeking the cool calm of a babbling brook in his throat. A fly visits her lower lip while he conjures confidence in fragments, notices the speck, struggles to ignore it and mumbles something about his favorite color. Her green. He knocks his wine on to her pale slippers, a sloppy apology, maroon stained concrete. Together hovering awake under the spell of staring, wading in secluded waters, collecting each other’s crescent shaped pebbles in clammy grips. The sun should not rise after such nights.
Shirt stuck to his chest
Swallowing two glowing hearts
Choking on her moon
