07-23-2014, 06:42 AM
Hello catface, and welcome. Good luck at the reading. I don't have time to leave a real crit before you go. I would agree that there is some over-rhyming in the 2nd half. I enjoyed the first part more. I hope you have S2 well rehearsed. Some tongue twisting going on there. Some nice ideas throughout though. Again, good luck. - Paul