07-22-2014, 10:53 PM
I love the beginning and the idea, babes are like that, the vine tendril is perfect. I think for the occasion I would have preferred statements instead of questions, or at least more present tense. What occasion is less in the past?
What does it know to wake
from a dream it resembles
to an uncertain fate?
But in your own form, of course.
I enjoyed the read, thanks for posting it.
What does it know to wake
from a dream it resembles
to an uncertain fate?
But in your own form, of course.
I enjoyed the read, thanks for posting it.
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