07-21-2014, 10:21 PM
What you have here is a haibun...a short poem, or prose piece that ends on a haiku that gets to the heart of what needed to be said. As a haibun, I love it. As just a haiku alone, I think it paints an incomplete picture (at least for me it did.)
There are lots of Japanese forms to explore, and I'm sure you'll do well at all of them. After all, you seem to have that reflective zen-like quality that no one can teach already down.
There are lots of Japanese forms to explore, and I'm sure you'll do well at all of them. After all, you seem to have that reflective zen-like quality that no one can teach already down.