We Remember

[KROD]

By Brian Johns
10-21-06

I know its rather long, so many feelings went into penning this.

It was a drunk driver
You were out with your friends
He crossed the center line
This is where your life ends
We’ll never know
The things you would have done
You were still in college
Almost twenty-one

We remember
It was a drunk driver
Who killed you that night
His truck hit you_ I'm not sure you need this
With all its might I'm not sure you need this
Our phone rang
At a quarter past four
I couldn’t believe
What I was hearing
I nearly fell to the floor
The tears flow down
As we put you in the ground
On this cold winter day
Nothing will ever be the same
It is all such a shame [b] I'm not sure you need this[/b]

We remember
It was a drunk driver
That made us lay you to rest [b]Might be redundant [/b]
You exist only in our hearts now
Forever you will always be the best
They planted a Maple tree [b]Look to shorten this maybe [/align][/b]
In your memory
They built a memorial in the park
Your candle is out now
Forever to be dark

We remember
It was a drunk driver
Who started us down this path
It’s really terrible b] I'm not sure you need this[/b]
If you do the math b] I'm not sure you need this[/b]
No more birthdays
Or holidays with your laugh
No more hugs or kisses
You’ll never get married
Or have any children
You were such a
“one in a million”
Sometimes we see you
While driving down the highway
I thought I saw you in the mall
When I turned to look again
There was no one at all
Sometimes we hear your voices
We try to follow the sound
Then we realize
There is no one around

We remember
It was a drunk driver
Who took your life from us
How can we ever forgive him
Would someone please tell me
Why your life had to end
It wasn’t your fault
He shouldn’t have been over there
Obviously, he really didn’t care
We’ll forever remember you
So young and pretty
At only twenty
You had already touched so many
With an infectious smile
And a contagious giggle
Even though
You were so little

We remember
It was a drunk driver
Who ruined the day
Life is so unfair
Why did you
Have to go this way
We will never forget
How you came along
Just that you
Are like a bird without a song
You will always be with us
Like the mountains and the sea
Always in our hearts
Locked without a key

I like the imagery that this brings. Sometimes when we write from a personal experience that may have been painful ( not sure if this is) its ok to just get your thoughts down. If you want to make it a poem for others to read, then we go back and do some editing. I would say to you to keep the emotional content there but perhaps looking where you can take parts out to keep the emotion strong. Try not to get so fixated on rhyme at the expense of conveying your message,theme, etc. You repeat "we remember it was a drunk driver" sort of like a chorus in a song. I just made notes where I don't think that part is needed ( i think there's more to edit but its your work . I like it though,lollol???????tectak