07-21-2014, 04:49 AM
I know nothing of this style of poem which may be why I am having some confusion, but on L3 it seems that the cold stew is the one experiencing the longing and on L7 it seems that the bedroom is the one hearing the shuffling of the loafers. Is this the intent in these lines? I get that he's home late so he's eating alone and that he's dragging his feet to the bedroom because her light is still on and he's avoiding the awkwardness of both of them avoiding the reality of an affair, but the middle section about dinner and slippers seems a little clumsy. Again, I don't know how this type of poem is supposed to work so it could just be me...