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[tectak]

With respect to tectak, 'refuge' is perfectly acceptable in terms of sense: the grass provides refuge, a place to fly to, from the paths. On the other hand, 'offer refuge' is a trifle hackneyed. I don't know whether it is cliché -but it is not fresh.

Likewise, with 'meanwhile' - it is not wrong, and denotes precisely the idea of simultaneity, just as if I said ' Escher is reading a crit. Meanwhile, I am making Cumberland sausages.' In other words you paint a picture --and that is all. You leave it at that, a cameo. Of course, I might be wrong.

It is simple, and sounds well, and might even be improved. For me, its charm is its simplicity, but it also runs the risk of being trite. It can be a fine line!

Welcome to the Pig!

Yep, Abu, "refuge" is fine...but he wanted to say "rest". The rest is fine
Best,
tectak