07-19-2014, 08:19 AM
Dale and Billy. I am always pleased to hear your thoughts, whatever forum I might post in. Where I post it is mostly a reflection of how seriously I might take the piece. I agree with you both about the second to last line. (caffeine might work here somehow - thx Dale) Because I wanted it to be an awkwardly rhyming poem that gives up the rhyme completely in the end. I do this quite often. Do you guys think this is a style habit I should move away from or just improve upon?
Thanks for your time. - Paul
Also, a side note: I changed "in 103" to "in 100 degrees" about 12 hours before the change appeared on the thread. Is this common? I think I used quick edit at the time.
Thanks for your time. - Paul
Also, a side note: I changed "in 103" to "in 100 degrees" about 12 hours before the change appeared on the thread. Is this common? I think I used quick edit at the time.