Oh, the Irony

[billy]

we have a poetry discussion board and a pigs arse for poetic discourse., these are the workshop forums and require honest though not cruel feedback.

i have to agree that there is some ambiguity in the poem and ambiguity of itself can work and be a good thing, i'm not sure it works well enough here. i do see the irony though having it mentioned three times waters any irony down quite a lot. it ends up telling us there's irony instead of letting the poem show us the beast of irony in person. the poem starts with the word rain; why? isn't it a given throughout the poem that the splashes are rain?
for me the poem has little depth and scratches the surface of homelessness. the rain isn't doing the job i think you intended for it
what are glazing eyes, would glazed eyes work better? in general the poem has a mundanity about it that weakens what could be a strong subject

thanks for the read.

I'm sorry, but is this a forum for poets or for people who prefer exact words for exact topics without any sense of poetic imagination? I'm a political activist who's fought for the low-income neighborhoods who are constantly attacked by wealthy businessmen and banks, threatening to throw them onto the streets without a home. This is gentrification - the replacing of urban low-income homes for wealthy families.

And this complaining of ambiguity - what!? When did ambiguity become a no-no for poetry? When did providing poems which can be translated to any specific person with enough imagination become a problem for poetry readers? When I read poetry, I'm not looking for poems which I know I agree with; I look for poetry which is creative and stylish and has the ability to speak many stories at once to different readers.

It's honestly sad to see poetry go down the drain by people who necessitate bluntness over imaginative poetic discourse.