07-16-2014, 04:14 AM
(07-16-2014, 03:43 AM)ajcohen613 Wrote: I'm glad you decided to write on this topic; Chicago has been too violent for too long. Though I do agree with ella in that you might want to title it more specifically, since this is a poem not only about a specific point in time but also a specific city. Also, death seems a bit flat in this poem. People die, people cry. Idk exactly how to fix this, but you might want to explore further avenues in representing death.Thank you and yes it has been too violent. I'm revising as we 'speak" Not sure what you mean by "death seems a bit flat". Do you mean the use of the word death or the whole concept of death throughout the poem?