07-16-2014, 03:43 AM
I'm glad you decided to write on this topic; Chicago has been too violent for too long. Though I do agree with ella in that you might want to title it more specifically, since this is a poem not only about a specific point in time but also a specific city. Also, death seems a bit flat in this poem. People die, people cry. Idk exactly how to fix this, but you might want to explore further avenues in representing death.
"Where there are roses we plant doubt.
Most of the meaning we glean is our own,
and forever not knowing, we ponder."
-Fernando Pessoa
Most of the meaning we glean is our own,
and forever not knowing, we ponder."
-Fernando Pessoa