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Listen REAL Good'
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07-15-2014, 05:14 PM
I got really lost in what this poem was about. I lost interest very quickly. The choppiness where you break the lines makes it difficult to read and understand. I, too, love the last bit, and I like the ideas you have here, but I might suggest compounding some of the lines or adding to a few of them to clarify what you're talking about. Maybe.
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Listen REAL Good' - by WordJunky - 07-05-2014, 09:49 PM
RE: Listen REAL Good' - by Erthona - 07-06-2014, 03:02 PM
RE: Listen REAL Good' - by vagabond - 07-06-2014, 09:41 PM
RE: Listen REAL Good' - by gernseeker - 07-13-2014, 12:00 PM
RE: Listen REAL Good' - by catfacemeowmers - 07-15-2014, 05:14 PM
RE: Listen REAL Good' - by cjchaffin - 08-05-2014, 11:51 AM
RE: Listen REAL Good' - by NietzscheKeen - 08-16-2014, 09:06 PM
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