84 Hours In Chicago

[catfacemeowmers]

I understand the last two stanzas, but the first seems to be about something else. There's a disconnect. There's information missing here that would clarify what the poem is about. What country? what do you mean death's ledge? Did they all die in gangs? what metal ripping flesh? I want more from this. I think it could be added to/further developed. Each stanza seems sudden and unrelated.

I love the rhyme of the last two lines.