07-15-2014, 09:47 AM
This poem reflects the events that happened over the July 4th (2014) weekend in Chicago in which 16 people were killed and 82 shot over a period of 84 hours.
This is my first edit to the poem. Took some suggestions and some of mine and this is what I have thus far. Title change was one.
84 Hours In Chicago
As our country celebrated its independence,
remembering when blood was shed
and lives were lost,
In Chicago,
injuries and death were the cost.
The smell of smoke
and the sound of metal,
rippin’ flesh,
some now laid to rest.
Mommies cryin’ for their young,
that are gone,
while daddies lose their first born.
Young ladies mourn their man,
‘cuz he chose the life in a gang.
16 fell off death’s ledge
82 shot and body devoured,
All in 84 hours.
ORIGINAL POEM
84 Hours
A country celebrates
remembering when blood was shed
and lives were lost,
but a country was born.
The smell of smoke and the sound of metal,
rippin’ flesh.
Mommies cryin’ for their young,
that are gone.
Daddies lose their first born.
Young ladies mourn their man,
‘cuz he chose the life in a gang.
16 fell off death’s ledge
82 shot and body devoured,
All in 84 hours.
This is my first edit to the poem. Took some suggestions and some of mine and this is what I have thus far. Title change was one.
84 Hours In Chicago
As our country celebrated its independence,
remembering when blood was shed
and lives were lost,
In Chicago,
injuries and death were the cost.
The smell of smoke
and the sound of metal,
rippin’ flesh,
some now laid to rest.
Mommies cryin’ for their young,
that are gone,
while daddies lose their first born.
Young ladies mourn their man,
‘cuz he chose the life in a gang.
16 fell off death’s ledge
82 shot and body devoured,
All in 84 hours.
ORIGINAL POEM
84 Hours
A country celebrates
remembering when blood was shed
and lives were lost,
but a country was born.
The smell of smoke and the sound of metal,
rippin’ flesh.
Mommies cryin’ for their young,
that are gone.
Daddies lose their first born.
Young ladies mourn their man,
‘cuz he chose the life in a gang.
16 fell off death’s ledge
82 shot and body devoured,
All in 84 hours.