07-14-2014, 01:32 AM
Hey,
I think there's a lot of potential in this "story-like" poem. Even though it maybe is a cliche, it is always nice to read a story with a motel romance aesthetic to it. Structure and punctuation have to be worked on. Description is good but try adding more figures of speech like metaphors to share your personal way of seeing the actions and surroundings. Good luck
Alex
I think there's a lot of potential in this "story-like" poem. Even though it maybe is a cliche, it is always nice to read a story with a motel romance aesthetic to it. Structure and punctuation have to be worked on. Description is good but try adding more figures of speech like metaphors to share your personal way of seeing the actions and surroundings. Good luck
Alex