Mechanized Man

[bena]

I find sonnets extremely hard to write, so I commend you as you have done rather well. Sometimes it takes me moment to figure out the meter of some others' iambs, but I didn't have trouble with yours. While I consider to be a fine poem, I'm not sure it really adds anything new. I did like your volta.

At any rate, someone with better knowledge on how to critique sonnets will come along and give much better advice.