Evening Drive (edit 1)

[Leanne]

Skipping engine, determined-
calmly, hair waving in the aimless gust -- why the adverb?
of a troubled Norther horizon. -- Northern?
Evening drive down Lone Star boulevards,
through Latin notes and voices,
youth kicking ball on public playgrounds -- just one ball on multiple playgrounds?
near the sidewalk,
on the outskirts,
passing boots and buried dreams on porches of
roadhouses
& dusky motels. -- these 3 lines are strong but I'm not convinced you break in the best place -- you end up with one line ending in "of" and one starting with an ampersand, which seems a waste of the most powerful parts of your lines
Sudden rain on tropic concrete,
familiar smells,
neon discussions-
calmly, hair wet and dripping down the leather seat, -- again with the "calmly" -- I still can't see the point
a newcomer on the other one. -- might consider dropping "one"
Soon the country hills surface in the sweet bleak moment of
new union and all is left behind. -- interesting change in tone and structure



Escape-

New dawn coffee & breakfast
staring in the whites,
faint blues notes of
lost desert moments;
tanned angels surrounding, -- probably don't need the comma here
in native tongue;
blazing sand
and eyes. -- would you consider "blazing sand,/ blazing eyes"? As it is now, the eyes just seem prosaic and tacked on


Escape-

For dialects of addiction,
fellow loss
of purpose, of soul, of truth; -- perhaps you could drop the 2nd and 3rd "of" to make a more concise list
they stood on the side of the road -- comma here?
choosing the soft
taxidermy of youth.