They bombed our Chippy

[just mercedes]

This would be a drastic edit based on everyone's comments. A few paths I could go down but this is the one that I'm feeling right now. Thanks Dale, Billy, Tom. Not quite sure if this is the right direction.




Date Night ??

On this last uncontested inch
we play upon, remember this: I don't think you need both
Grace ain't forgetting.

If there's football on this Christmas Day,
I couldn't watch if we couldn't play, if we didn't play?
but Grace ain't forgetting.

So even if this too should pass-
over the painted jamb on our house of glass,you're trying to cram too much into this line
Grace ain't forgetting.

And the football on that Christmas Day,
was played not quite how children play.
Grace is not forgetting.

Hi - I like the edit - did you put it above your original post as well? I'm not sure what's going on, but I feel I don't have to worry - Grace has it all sussed! I don't know why the refrain line changed for the last stanza from casual street to formal. The football game seems to be both in the present and in the past.

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This would be a drastic edit based on everyone's comments. A few paths I could go down but this is the one that I'm feeling right now. Thanks Dale, Billy, Tom. Not quite sure if this is the right direction.




Date Night ??

On this last uncontested inch
we play upon, remember this: I don't think you need both
Grace ain't forgetting.

If there's football on this Christmas Day,
I couldn't watch if we couldn't play, if we didn't play?
but Grace ain't forgetting.

So even if this too should pass-
over the painted jamb on our house of glass,you're trying to cram too much into this line
Grace ain't forgetting.

And the football on that Christmas Day,
was played not quite how children play.
Grace is not forgetting.

Hi - I like the edit - did you put it above your original post as well? I'm not sure what's going on, but I feel I don't have to worry - Grace has it all sussed! I don't know why the refrain line changed for the last stanza from casual street to formal. The football game seems to be both in the present and in the past.