He visits gangs in the meadow - Edit 1

[Alexearth]

bena wrote:

Dale you were nice in novice. Alot (sic) nicer than I could have been, and I really loved that. Where's your sack here??? I have bigger balls right now and I'm not sure they go with the tits. This is MILD critique. I know is not serious, but give some stronger advice. He may not know exactly what I mean, so don't just tell him I'm right...........................

Well, he is a newbi and this is mild critique! I will accept blame for not being clear enough when I said you were right. I was referring to the following line by you:

"What Dale means is that these are not independent clauses. They can't stand alone as complete thought. They are linked to other clauses that are the same."

Being judicious does not in anyway shrivel the size of one's gonads.

I'm probably going to get modded for answering you, but I wanted to clear up any lack of clearness about what I meant.

Dale

We need truthful and direct feedback! I think i'll slowly go to serious workshopping..