To: All the Girls

[bena]

Don't know where you are from---haven't read other crits so I apologize if I repeated but I sang the title "To all the girls I've loved before"....Not sure that's what you wanted.

Would suggest (if it were I) "A letter to Jill"

and perhaps people will get that this is a modern (and more complicated) re-telling of Jack & Jill.

FIx your awkward grammar, and your punctuation ans words like dimorphic...... and this will be a winner.


bena the never-sleeper.