07-06-2014, 05:52 AM
"Sighs a certain train in the distance" "sights"?
I don't understand what this is supposed say, I have no idea if it is referencing birds or hoodlums. I have never found stringing dependent clauses together an effective tool to set the scene. I'm all for brevity, but not at the cost of clarity.
Dale
I don't understand what this is supposed say, I have no idea if it is referencing birds or hoodlums. I have never found stringing dependent clauses together an effective tool to set the scene. I'm all for brevity, but not at the cost of clarity.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.