07-05-2014, 08:02 PM
Didactic--- it is rather, admit it! I don't know what meter you really were trying for but at the beginning I started reading it in a sing-song, almost nursery rhyme way, and that turned into Sir Walter Scott's 'Lochinvar', and then my critical powers failed.
Telling people how it is never seems to work in poetry. The reader just responds with ''What? Don't agree'' unless s/he is lured in, with all kinds of trickery.
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Lochinvar
By Sir Walter Scott
O young Lochinvar is come out of the west,
Through all the wide Border his steed was the best;
And save his good broadsword he weapons had none,
He rode all unarm’d, and he rode all alone.
So faithful in love, and so dauntless in war,
There never was knight like the young Lochinvar
Telling people how it is never seems to work in poetry. The reader just responds with ''What? Don't agree'' unless s/he is lured in, with all kinds of trickery.
e
Lochinvar
By Sir Walter Scott
O young Lochinvar is come out of the west,
Through all the wide Border his steed was the best;
And save his good broadsword he weapons had none,
He rode all unarm’d, and he rode all alone.
So faithful in love, and so dauntless in war,
There never was knight like the young Lochinvar