Jazz

[Agamemnon]

Having gotten into jazz about two years ago and being into jamming I find this poem to be very interesting. I agree with what someone said above about the poem being fragmented and disorganized, however I find that if this is to mimic the sound of a jazz jam this might be perfect as jazz musicians do play around a lot of with the rhythm in their phrases. I also do quite like the city imagery this evokes.

I find it to be jazzy in its own right. I'm not too familiar with poetry of this kind to offer an amazing critique but if the aforementioned jazz mimicry is what you're going for, then I say it's pretty good.