07-05-2014, 11:26 AM
Hey Dale. I really like this one. I've come back to it a few times and only have minor notes of mostly personal preference.
(07-04-2014, 08:18 AM)Erthona Wrote: Ding Dong
I was famous once. Great starting tone
Then the cult of personality "'till" might sound more conversational,
tore me in the tabloids, my favorite line
crucified me in celluloid,
and hung me by a rope
of my own making; of my own braiding?
until I was
dead-dead-dead! I like the last line. There might be other punctuation options, but I'm sure you've weighed them.
–Erthona
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