Said the Priest to the Elder

[metalfan91]

That does clear things up a bit. However you say you don't want this to be all in favor of the natives, but that
doesn't really come across. So maybe after the priest starts ranting you could write another part where the elder says or does
something that discredits him too?

Anyways, version 2 I like way better

I don't want this to be in "favor" of anyone, but when you look at journals, or some primary sources that give us a look into what people thought during these days of colonization, natives were genuinely seen as irrational, unhygienic, and barbaric. I still want that to come through. This view of natives, of course, was not true for every single immigrant, but it was an effective political tool and means for fostering support for assimilation and later removal.

I thought about this before posting, but I don't think the elder necessarily needs to be discredited. If the Elder and his people were to invade the Priest's town it would be a different story. However, I still could find a way to work it in. The line "Stay your hands brothers..." refers to the Elder telling his own men, not the Priests' men, to lay down arms. I'm still trying to make that more apparent.

Thanks for reading and giving me editing ammo

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I think I pretty much got all of it (before I read the comments), but then again I've read history. I think the problem of this is it outlines that history (especially in what is now the United States), but does not really inspire anything, it just kind of falls flat, nor does it seem to know what it intends to accomplish. My response at the end was, "OK, so what".


Dale

I know what you mean by this "outlining history." It's the difference between the actual thing and its representation, right? I could have presented more "real" dialogue instead of the "propaganda" that another comment suggested. Maybe I could flesh it out in that direction, but I'm afraid I still need practice.

However, I think that this way it is easier to observe the spirit of invasion and colonization. Here I tried to take what all the Priests would say to all the Elders of the world, and in the process I move toward the "essence" of what they would say. Is that what is meant by "outline."

Thanks for reading me.