07-05-2014, 02:26 AM
(07-04-2014, 07:08 PM)Alexearth Wrote: * I try here to establish an atmosphere more than giving concrete explanations on what is happening.
A hum in the red sky
detached people quiet
around long dining table
front yards at day
St-Augustine lawn shivers
in silent madness
terrible sights of deathless track homes
curtains stir where
rifts form
he opens the trunk and puts in the bags
always a plot and a parallel romance
he runs to the cities
he has bigger visions
Hi Alex: I see some atmosphere here, a bit truncated, but atmosphere is everywhere; what's the point? Best Loretta