His Demise
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A midnight blue circle grows on
The acid wash of his denim pants
That matches the ink bleeding out
Of his pen
This is nice to circle back to the top and make a hard hit.

I am crushed during the ending however. I get twisted. I feel that I am with you but then I am lost.
Nice work. I did enjoy reading hope I offered some insight.

ZM
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Messages In This Thread
His Demise - by chaizoe - 05-01-2013, 08:33 AM
RE: His Demise - by Volaticus - 05-02-2013, 06:30 AM
RE: His Demise - by newsclippings - 07-04-2014, 12:52 PM
RE: His Demise - by Erthona - 07-04-2014, 04:07 PM
RE: His Demise - by zmeansy - 07-04-2014, 05:16 PM
RE: His Demise - by Alexearth - 07-04-2014, 06:12 PM
RE: His Demise - by jbreze - 07-04-2014, 08:50 PM
RE: His Demise - by KROD - 07-14-2014, 01:24 AM
RE: His Demise - by tectak - 07-14-2014, 04:45 AM



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