07-04-2014, 04:07 PM
chaizoe,
Because of the oddness of the words used, the lack of good punctuation makes this difficult to make sense of. Or it could be as often happens when the writer is new to poetry, that they assume the reader knows what they know, and so do not include enough information to make what they write sensible.
I get that his pen has broken and leaked ink on his clothes. I also get that this is an incident where his daughter is on him, or riding him while he sits in the rocking chair, and she causes it to rock so violently that a window is broken. Is it sexual or innocent? I've no idea. Evidently his pen is broken, and he pees on himself and this is the mess that his daughter is responsible for. "Demise" can refer to death, but also to failure, or losing status. How do "seal bladders" fir into this? Is there a connection to the Inuit way of hunting whales, by the use of an inflated seal bladder to tire the whale when it tries to dive? It seems a long way to go just to say in a round about way that he has a weak bladder.
It is not the reader's job to guess at the intent of the writer, it is the writers job to make that intent clear enough that the reader does not have to do a lot of guessing at the meaning of a piece, as the reader is forced to here.
Do your readers a favor and put capitols only at the start of sentences, and periods always at the end of them.
Welcome to the site,
Dale
Because of the oddness of the words used, the lack of good punctuation makes this difficult to make sense of. Or it could be as often happens when the writer is new to poetry, that they assume the reader knows what they know, and so do not include enough information to make what they write sensible.
I get that his pen has broken and leaked ink on his clothes. I also get that this is an incident where his daughter is on him, or riding him while he sits in the rocking chair, and she causes it to rock so violently that a window is broken. Is it sexual or innocent? I've no idea. Evidently his pen is broken, and he pees on himself and this is the mess that his daughter is responsible for. "Demise" can refer to death, but also to failure, or losing status. How do "seal bladders" fir into this? Is there a connection to the Inuit way of hunting whales, by the use of an inflated seal bladder to tire the whale when it tries to dive? It seems a long way to go just to say in a round about way that he has a weak bladder.
It is not the reader's job to guess at the intent of the writer, it is the writers job to make that intent clear enough that the reader does not have to do a lot of guessing at the meaning of a piece, as the reader is forced to here.
Do your readers a favor and put capitols only at the start of sentences, and periods always at the end of them.
Welcome to the site,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.