Fred Flintstone Limerick

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Brownlie. I've read this a bunch of times and always enjoy it. I like the edit better than the original, other than my one note below.

Believe it or not I actually edited this thing, and changed a near rhyme to a more "pure" rhyme.


I work from below and before,
And mine in this bedrock for ore.I liked the original version of this line. It feels like you inserted "in" here, for meter's sake, but it doesn't really belong. I think you could still tinker with it.
While hacking this stone,
I rabble and groan
That Jetson will always have more.






Original:

While mining this bedrock for ore,
I never see Spacely or George.
When hacking this stone,
I work and I groan
That Jetson will always have more.

Thanks for sharing. -Paul